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- Write in past-progressive tense
- Use powerful action verbs
Only include what is powerful, meaningful and important
We had to write a story on this senates starter “No, no, no!” I was sliding back into the dream.
Here is mean. “No, no, no!” I was sliding back into the dream. Then I heard screaming and realised I was not in a dream I was in a nightmare. I saw zombies and skeletons stumbling for me. The zombies drooling splat as the skeletons where crawling towards me. I was running for the house then a ghost running for me I was frozen in fear then was running for me. Then...it went through me. So I was running for the house. I went into the house. Then the zombie were breaking down the door.I was clenching my hand. They broke down the door. Then I was suddenly running for the door. I was knocking the zombies off me. I was out but it was dark. I was running for a side that had its on. There was a torch setting there. I was clenching the torch in my hand as I was shivering. A zombie was flying at me. I was running to the lighthouse then as I got to the top of the lith sun was
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